Xiaoli hurriedly put away her smile, but it was too late.

Song Tae's gaze lingered on her for a few seconds, then he turned his head and asked Li Jiming, "What advice do you have for this comic?" ”

"He's just not very solid in his artwork, but the setting and story are very good, and the storyboard is atmospheric. It's rare to meet such a great painter these days. Li Jiming expressed his opinion.

"What are his shortcomings other than his work?" Song Tae asked.

"And?" Li Jiming scratched his head, and couldn't think of it for a while.

Song Tai looked at Xiaoli again, "I heard that you said that this name has shortcomings at the serialization meeting?" ”

"Huh?" Xiaoli's mouth opened slightly, her brain was a little dazed, and she subconsciously said, "Hmm." ”

"What are the shortcomings, I'll listen, except for the painters." Song Tae asked.

"Disadvantages......" Xiaoli's forehead showed sweat, and her throat was a little dry, "That's right." Of course, it's not a painter, in fact, although his painting is not solid, but a comic with good drawing and storyboard is not necessarily a good comic. The biggest problem with this work is the story. ”

"Story?" Song Taiwei Leng, he never thought it would be a problem with the story.

"The story is novel, how can there be a problem? Is it you who has a problem? Li Jiming sneered.

"Of course there is a problem!" Xiaoli couldn't stand Li Jiming's ridicule, regardless of Yan Fei's eyes, and said without hesitation, "The story of this comic is too scattered!" ”

"What?"

"Too scattered?"

"What is Taisan?"

The people in the room looked confused, and even Yan Fei didn't know what Xiaoli was thinking.

"Too scattered? How can there be such a disadvantage? Li Jiming sneered.

Song Tai's gaze swept over the name of the first word, "I think the story is okay, what's the matter with what you said is too scattered?" ”

Xiaoli knew that everyone else was looking at her, and she knew that she had no room to turn back, so she could only bite the bullet and say, "President, you will know after reading the three words in one go." ”

Song Tai was suspicious and read the content of the three words.

From the second episode, the protagonist leaves the underworld to find the reason for the creation of the puppet, but he has never found it, and at the end of the second episode, he returns to Huangquan again.

Due to the experience of the last time, the number of guards in Huangquan has doubled compared to before, and the souls have entered Huangquan one after another.

Just when he thought that the last puppet was just an accident, he suddenly noticed that the souls in the rear formed a puppet again, trying to devour the souls nearby, and walked towards the underworld, and the battle was about to break out.

The third episode has no plot and is not complicated, that is, the protagonist and the puppet have launched a gripping fierce battle.

"Scattered...... In what place? After Song Tai finished reading it, he looked up at Xiaoli again.

Li Jiming saw Xiaoli with a tangled face, the corners of his mouth were slightly upturned, and he inadvertently showed a smile.

"Scattered in ...... The structure of its story. Xiaoli's words were a little hesitant, "There is something wrong with the structure of its story. ”

"You're talking too much, aren't you? What can be wrong with the structure? Li Jiming asked rhetorically.

"Brother Li, you are also an old editor, you should be clear. The reason why the first sentence should have more than 50 pages is to use a small high. The tide attracts the reader, and then the story slowly unfolds. As for the background of the fictional world, the first episode has to be involved, and from the second episode onwards, it has to be expanded, right? ”

"That's right. Ahem...... Teacher Fat Dahai, I also drew it like this, is there any problem? Li Jiming asked.

"Yes. The name of "Ghost Potential" has been drawn to three words, let me ask you, what is the connection between the title of the book and the story? I haven't even explained what "Ghost Potential" is in the three words, isn't the structure still dissolved? I remember that Mr. Shen pointed out the origin of the title of "Y's" in the first episode, and the later story has been around Iori and Yi Gui. But "Ghost Potential", so far, is more than wonderful, but it is easy to confuse readers. In the end, Xiaoli also had confidence.

Li Jiming was a little overwhelmed and hesitant, and he didn't know how to defend himself for a while.

Song Tai bowed slightly, "It's a little interesting, the first three episodes really emphasize the plot too much, but ignore the theme that the comic needs to express the most." Lao Li, you shouldn't make this kind of mistake. ”

"I was accidental...... This will never be the case next time. Li Jiming hurriedly explained.

He only cares about whether the story is exciting, but forgets the arrangement of the plot.

"Is that so?" Fat Dahai's teacher is very thoughtful and has a good storyboard, but the story needs to be tempered a little more, after all, he is also a strong newcomer to "New World". It's just other ......" Song Tai knocked on the table twice, and suddenly handed the name to Xiaoli, "Xiaoli, you and "Ghost Potential" in the future, after all, you are all young people, and it is not easy to have a generation gap." By the way, let him change his pen name. Lao Li, you also take the time to improve your business level. ”

"Huh?"

"Huh?"

Li Jiming and Xiaoli exclaimed in unison.

Things turned around a little quickly.

"Xiaoli, you have to follow well, and strive to bring out another copy of "Y's". Song Ren, hurry up and find the audio of the voice actor and send it to Teacher Shen. Song Tae waved his hand and motioned for everyone to leave.

When she got out of the office, Xiaoli breathed a sigh of relief.

Li Jiming snorted coldly, didn't say much, and went down the stairs in a huff, and Song Ren also entered the elevator.

Xiaoli kept holding Yan Fei's hand and came to the reception room to rest.

"Sister Yan, Teacher Shen really saved his life." After Xiaoli sat down, she immediately opened the conversation.

"Teacher Shen Xin?" Yan Fei guessed.

"Who else but him?" Xiaoli nodded repeatedly.

"He hasn't seen the name, has he?"

"Nope. But what I said was his comment on the short story 'Fat Sea'. I just used it for a while, and as a result, his novel really had a problem with the structure. Sister Yan, I want to take the time to visit Teacher Shen, is that okay? ”

Yan Fei was stunned for a moment, and then found that Xiaoli's hands on the table were a little trembling. She can understand Xiaoli's current mood, this newcomer is expected by many people, in case she doesn't get up in the end, Xiaoli, as the editor-in-charge, will definitely be the first to take responsibility.

If you can let Shen Xin give one or two suggestions, maybe you can give Xiaoli some ideas or confidence.

"Now?"

"When does he have time?" Xiaoli's face was full of anticipation.

"Weekend, huh? By now he should be busy drawing the original manuscript and not have much time. By the way, why don't you go and hand over to Li Jiming? Yan Fei asked.

"I'll go now. He taunted me like that just now, and now it's time for me to fight back. I just like to see him angry and bullied. Xiaoli said with a smile.

Yan Fei tapped Xiaoli's forehead, "Okay, don't push him into a hurry." ”

"Yes!" Xiaoli twisted her neck, looking excited.

This week, Xiaoli and Li Jiming completed the handover of work, and at the same time, she also saw "Fat Dahai", sure enough, just like the legend, it is a little Zhengtai, whose name is Zhou Yang, who has a shy personality and is a very good talker.

At first, Xiaoli thought that Zhou Yang was difficult to contact, but after the exchange, she knew that he had nothing special except for being a little shy, and he was also more talkative.

It can't be a women's clothing boss, right?

Noticing Xiaoli's bright eyes, the corners of his mouth were even saliva, Zhou Yang immediately declared that these were not his things, but Xiaoli didn't believe it at all.